‘In silent sufferance’ – Plane and simple
‘In silent sufferance” is the fortnightly theme on S&Co. and this is my contribution.
Eleven long hours its been,
Since the shores of my homeland seen
The inflight music, an incessant drone
Someone, lend me an ear-phone!
I stretch, I bend, and wince and moan,
Muffled sounds, I piteously groan
I turn to my left, and then to my right,
Arrrgh! This is one horrible night!
Until finally, with valour I stare
At the pot-bellied man, who polished his fare!
He looks at me, lets a toothy smile,
Phew! That gust of wind smells vile!!
The aloo-tikki has done its job
That awful mooli on the hob!
With a happy ‘Burrrrp’, he rubs his tummy
Winks at me, and asks ‘Some rummy?’
I weakly smile, pretend I’m homesick
In unstated misery, I see my watch tick
When? Oh when..will this journey end
Oh! Run for cover! He’s going to bend!
How I wish I could summon the crew
And have thrown this monster, into the loo!
Or push him out of the aircraft? Don’t!!
I would if I could, but I can’t so I won’t!
Please let me know what you think. I think it needs a lot of re-work. Editing, Tweaking, whatever. Suggestions/critique eagerly sought
me first!!! wow
ROFL too good pal
Me: First ofcourse, Mon
Glad you liked it!
Lolzzz Good one
Me: Thank you Prats
Good one Pal!
You know right? I’m your biggest fan when it comes to your poetry and short stories!!
Me: Pixu, you are a little darling! Seriously! thank you
So glad we are friends!
So you were the pretty one sitting on my right
I thought you looked a little bit dazed and uptight
reason I gave you that toothy smile to say it’s alright
now that you’ve said what you thought I feel contrite.
Pallavi, just beautiful. Perfect!
Me: Thank you, PRG, for that lovely verse! So now I know which flights I must avoid
I didn’t know that I made you so annoyed
so as to plan what flights you should avoid
you have completely my self esteem destroyed
I am reduced to something less than an android.
Me: LOL! Wish I could come up with a 4-liner, or even a 2-liner to respond to that!
before I say nething … what is S & Co. ??
Me: Ooops..sorry, should have made that clearer. Its an informal writer’s forum called Shakespeare and Co, hosted on Ryze network. And you must see the quality of writing there…mind-blowing! I feel intimidated to even post a comment on their work!
heyyy, thats a funny poem ! Wish most of the poems are like this — understand-able
Me: Oh no! Is this understandable? Then its not a poem at all
ROFL
Nice work, Pal. Humour in verse, not an easy job that. esp liked the line “Oh! Run for cover! He’s going to bend!”
Me: Glad you liked it, Dreamer! Thank u so much
I love rhymes that are fun…!!
Yeah, each and every one
Mooli parathas have a bad name


Rajma and Chole have similar fame?
But the paranthas are yum
Superb slurrrrpy ekdum!!
Only when the finger licking is done
Like musical pipes and rolling drum
Every morsel relished better than whiskey or rum
Wants to announce it’s presence from the tum
Ah then the real celebrations begin!
Why does good taste,
On the way to becoming a waste
Feel like such a sin
Pass another one please,
Add some gobhi and green peas
Me: LOL! Wow! Did you write that in a jiffy? That’s cool, IHM!
Ha..ha.. good one!
Me: Thanku Soli
LOL
Gud one Pal
Me: LOL
Once, there was this lady on the flight, and every time she opened her mouth, I would want to die!!
simply sooperb pals…
Me: Nish, thankuuuuu
This is hillarious !!!
Me: He he, thank you. Your earlier comment was equally funny
I love to read poetry… but am bad at being a critique
Me: And I don’t even like poetry. I like rhymes and fast-paced poems, though, but simply cannot stand what they call ‘free verse’.
Thanks for visiting my blog
The poem dint look like one written based on a theme.. It was so lively and had a natural flow. Congratulations
Me: Thank you for returning the visit, G3. Will be regular on your blog hereafter
And thank you very much for your words of appreciation
adutha TR udhayamaagitaanga pola
cha..major sundarrajan mathiri aidichi
)
(not sure if u know tamil..next TR on the rising
is this one wrote on a theme!! 2 gud
Me: Che! Poyium poyium TRaaa? Yes, this is on a theme
enga thaanai thalaivar TRku ennaga kuraichal…agila ulaga TR rasigarmanram mumbai kilai saarbaaga ithai naan vanmaiyaaga aatchebikiren
Me: LOL
No comments
Pal, u know tamil ?????
Uma- Spent all my life in Tamil Nadu
its superb, funny and light Pals… I liked it
Me: Thanku very very much, Kanagu
Seeing a poem I got serious and then you turned it into Laugh riot …
easier to read a humorous poem ….
Me: Thank you so much, Dman. I don’t like serious stuff at all
hilarious,Pal!laughed my heart out
Me: Thank you verry much, Deeps!
hohohoh
superb hillarious
Me: Oh thank you
And, thank you also, for all those lovely comments!
I like the rhyme maintained through out the prose, I know its tough to find similar sounding words fitting to the requirement
Me: Thank you PS. You bet, it is
Hi Pals,
You have been awarded:
http://kanaguonline.wordpress.com/2009/11/01/awards-time/
Me: Hey, thank you!! Just checked out your blog and will be back to collect the awards
Dont doubt, Pal – This poem is indeed a very gud one !!!
BTW, how have u been ??? Its been a long time in Bloggy world, for me. Just finished reading all your blogs, which I missed here. Belated Happy Birthday to your little Aladin FAN !!!! The TAG was interesting and the Dentist episode was super funny !!!! Did u go for the next appt ??? Pl make sure they do the right tooth, this time.
Me: Thank you for missing me, Ums! I’ve been away too, and just managed to respond to all these lovely comments!
Wow that is some gas-tronomical ass-ault
Me: Heee haaaaawwww! Ritu, you amaze one by your word-play!!
Too good!
btw Congratulations! 6th position @ the ‘Indiblogger of the Month’! Not bad at all
Thank u, Rosh! Hey, how did u find out the Indiblogger results? 6th ? Thank you for letting me know. And thanks to all my friends who voted